At brunch, you placed your hand
On my back and whispered,
“You have beautiful eyes.”
I blushed and asked your name.
You knew you had landed
A needy one, an easy
One. You knew that. You knew.
On the phone later, you
Told me I was special.
I didn’t believe you. No.
You wait for me to fall.
You knew you had landed
A needy one, an easy
One. You knew that. You knew.
A date turned into six years.
When things fell apart, you
Told me we should end it.
You knew you would be fine.
You knew you had landed
A needy one, an easy
One. You knew that. You knew.
You knew you had landed
A needy one, an easy
One. You knew that. You knew.
@rayboneor Feb 2022
It's interesting: we only get this one perspective, and there's a fair degree of self-loathing, perhaps. However, that relationship lasted six years, so there's probably a lot more to it...a lot more than the narrator is willing to say at this vulnerable time. It's an apparently simple lyric that gives one more to think about. The repetition will be great in a song
@tseaver Feb 2022
Nice write! The chimes in the chorus are really hooky, even without music set to them (yet).
@mistermann Feb 2022
This is at least getting an acoustic treatment from me because I have to get it out of my head, but I’m excited to see if anyone else picks it up. Great first entry!
@berni1954 Feb 2022
Good evocation of a parasitical person and the narrative perfectly set up the conclusion.