Sharp knives
Leave scars
And buried bodies
Beneath the stars
I didn't choose
To live this way
But I've gone too far
And I can't stay
I leave one world
Full of grief
Looking for something
Lying beneath
I hope there's peace
On the other side
So I can breathe
And not have to hide.
@petemurphy Feb 2022
The rawness and 'directness' (is that a word?) of your lyrics is always a thing to behold.
Beautifully written!
@tamsnumber4 Feb 2022
And the soul twisting and contemplation begins...another FAWM to soak in the darkness of your art.........
@dukongp100 Feb 2022
Vivid imagery and a good take on the theme. Dark and sorrow inducing
@bradbrubaker Feb 2022
Painful. Hoping you're not in this place at the moment. As for the tune, the use of the word "beneath" in the third stanza is what stuck out to me most. It's like an uncovering, but it's also the ground...and also it's the "underworld" of death. The phrase from the first stanza "buried bodies beneath the stars" made me think this might be going in a homicidal direction at first, but then it quickly became clear the sights were set inward.
@aeye Feb 2022
you're able to capture raw emotion in such a short time when you write. intense, but you can sense relief in the words as well.
@metalfoot Feb 2022
Dark and intense- the hope for peace is very relatable.